This poem carries the longing and the tenderness of a heart unafraid to feel deeply. The journey you’ve captured; of waiting, of losing oneself in love, of the fragile dance between hope and despair, is timeless. The way you expressed the surreal (the indigo moon, the rabbit hole) into the rawness of human emotion shows a gift not just for poetry, but for understanding the unspoken layers of existence.
As with Alice, this poem too falls into a realm of self-discovery through pain. And yet, even in the fall, there is the potential for flight, a recognition that ‘what shatters us also unveils the truths we hide from ourselves.’
I hope you will keep exploring this journey, not just outwardly through words but inwardly, as poetry often leads to unexpected revelations about the self.
Remember, the finest poetry often comes from places of vulnerability. You have opened that door beautifully here. Trust that your voice is enough, and let it guide you to places even you have yet to imagine.
Write boldly. Love gently. Live fully. The world needs more poets like you.
This poem carries the longing and the tenderness of a heart unafraid to feel deeply. The journey you’ve captured; of waiting, of losing oneself in love, of the fragile dance between hope and despair, is timeless. The way you expressed the surreal (the indigo moon, the rabbit hole) into the rawness of human emotion shows a gift not just for poetry, but for understanding the unspoken layers of existence.
As with Alice, this poem too falls into a realm of self-discovery through pain. And yet, even in the fall, there is the potential for flight, a recognition that ‘what shatters us also unveils the truths we hide from ourselves.’
I hope you will keep exploring this journey, not just outwardly through words but inwardly, as poetry often leads to unexpected revelations about the self.
Remember, the finest poetry often comes from places of vulnerability. You have opened that door beautifully here. Trust that your voice is enough, and let it guide you to places even you have yet to imagine.
Write boldly. Love gently. Live fully. The world needs more poets like you.
Wow the feels this made me experience 🥹
thankyouu sab
ALESHA THIS IS SO AMAZING DONT CALL IT AWFUL
MAYA TYSN FOR READING
Beautiful!!
Loved the cadence 👏♥️